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2017年考研英语写作点评
写作,是考研英语的“重头戏”,正如我们所知道的一样,它的重要性不言而喻。可是,一直以来,我们都是在以文字的形式去阐述“要怎样做,不要怎样做”,太过枯燥。今天,文都英语老师将以学生写的作文作为范例,以生动形象的方式告诉大家,我们到底该如何把握大作文。我们先看下下面这篇范文。
范文:
The bar chart above demonstrates clearly and logically that some obvious changes have taken place in terms of different car brands in China's market. In accordance to the figures in the diagram, one can observe that the percentage of Chinese cars has witnessed an evident rise ,while the percentage of Janpanese cars has been on a considerable drop. Sprecifically speaking ,the percentage of Chinese cars increased from 25percent in 2008 to almost 35 percent in 2009.
Such tendency mirrored by the graph can be attributed to a number of factors, but the following two may carry more conviention. One factor is that the economy has developed rapidly in recent years, and therefore there would be more money avaliable for cars. Another factor is that the evolution in the field of Chinese science and techology directly contributes to such phenomenon reflected by the graph.
Take what has been analyed into consideratiPn, we may saftely draw a conclusion: the current trend is positive and therefore acceptable. And I am firmly certain that this trend will continve in the years to come.
点评:
整篇文章179词,符合考研英语二大作文的写作要求。一般来说,比题目要求的多出20词左右的作文是最佳的,最好不要刚好压着题目要求的最低字数。而且,这位同学在句子的开头空出了四个字符也很好,这一点和中文中的空出两个汉字有所区别。但是,这篇作文也不可避免的存在一些问题:
⑴单词拼写问题
第一段第四行Sprecifically应为specifically; 第三段第一句中analyed应为analyzed, consideratiPn 应该是consideration.
⑵语法问题
①may carry more conviention表达不准确,应该改成may carry more attention;
②Take what has been analyed into consideratiPn,这句话有问题,这个句子中有两个动词Take和has been analyed, has been analyed在what引导的从句中,只能是what从句的谓语动词,那take应该是句子的谓语动词吧,可是句子没有主语,再往后看我们会发现“we may saftely draw a conclusion”主谓宾齐全,是个结构完整的句子,这样一来前面就只是分词作状语了,表示主动,那就应该用现在分词Taking.所以这句话就可以改成:
Taking what has been analyzed into account, we may saftely draw a conclusion that the current trend is positive and therefore acceptable.
③可能有许多同学会觉得第二段的理由阐述部分自己分析的不是很对,写的不太好,文都英语老师告诉大家,其实没关系。因为,对于同一问题,不同的人肯定“仁者见仁,智者见智”,只要能够自圆其说、令人信服就可以了;
④总的来说,这篇文章写的还行。如果能够把第一段少写点,中间论述充分点,最好能做到“两头小,中间大”,那就更好了。
作文和其他部分不同,只有多写多练才能找到问题所在。文都英语老师希望小伙伴们平时多多训练,相信有志者最终能够梦想成真!
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